Another Experimental Piece

This is quite an old piece, written in my first couple weeks of university. It was done in my module Language, Writing, and Reading. This module was about understanding the basics of writing including punctuation, grammar, sentence structure, how we read, how we write etc. This module also encourage us to explore these things and how by changing a certain aspect of our writing we can change its reading completely.

Anyway, for this piece we had to choose 8 nouns, 4 concrete (Physical objects) and 4 abstract (Not physical but still something you can possess). Mine were: Dog, Man, Table, and Tree. Then: Strength, Sadness, Fear, and Love.

After we had chosen our nouns we then had to write a story including each of the concrete nouns, here's mine:

It was late and everyone had left the cafe except an old man who sat in the shadow the leaves of the tree made in the electric light. He had been there all day, sat in the same wicker chair at the same table without moving. The waiters had asked if wanted to order anything, but he only ever asked for tap water. The man sipped at the water until the glass was empty, and the waiter would bring another. Men and women had walked by and still he did not move. Dogs ran up to him and wagged their tails; begging to be petted and still he did not move. He was as still as an old tree on a windless day. Everyone had left the cafe and still he did not move.

So now we had to:
Swap the concrete nouns for the abstract nouns we chose,
Make all the sentences under 19 words long,
Replace he/she for the word 'it',
Cut out all punctuation.
And this is what I got:

It was late and everyone had left the cafe except an old sadness who sat in the shadow the leaves of the love made against the electric light it had been there all day sat in the same wicker chair at the same fear without moving the waiters had asked if it wanted to order anything but it only ever asked for tap water the sadness sipped at the water until the glass was empty and the waiters would bring another men and women had walked by and still it did not move strengths ran up to him and wagged their tails begging to be petted and still it did not move it was as still as an old love on a windless day everyone had left the cafe and still it did not move

How about you give it a go?